“the pleasure of biting into it…”

Now, there’s a phrase that may be promising more than the blog delivers. Or maybe the blog will deliver more?

The essay was on fast-food restaurants and their alleged enabling of the obesity epidemic in America. The problem in the complete sentence from my student’s essay is mere pronoun reference.

I’m deep in reading final papers, so I leave the complex and deep delights of the passage to my own readers to plumb for themselves:

“It seems as if there is a restaurant on every corner and once it is seen the sensation of biting into it fills the body.”

Love that bricks-and-mortar! Want fries with it?

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About RAB

Teacher of English writing and literature (college-level); academic-freedom activist; editor and copy editor; theater director, costumer, actress, playwright. View all posts by RAB

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